Can Intense really describe
What I felt
Just as we locked eyes?
This inability
To keep my eyes level
With yours
To keep from smiling
When nothing
Was said
Overly self conscious
Yet unaware
Of movements I make
While I sneak glances
At your face
Something uncharted
Unexplored
But somehow
From being scared
Not giving it a chance
I feel
You walked out the door
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here is hope for 2nd chances
oh! must be missing something great i tell you 🙂
loved the lines..the sharp intake…
Describe perfectly with lines like ‘…. overly self conscious yet unaware of the movement I make..’
You know, this remind me of what happened when I met a guy a few years back… Almost somewhat the same scene, same motion of feelings.. 🙂
Love this.. well, here is mine..
http://www.tingtasy.com/2011/03/collections-of-tings-poetry-tp20-that.html
Hope you will drop by.. 🙂 See you!!
lovely delivery of sneaking glance,
Thanks for sharing..
you submitted one week ago, now it is linked to poets rally week 40.
have fun.
This is a great read! 🙂
Those stolen glances that heat a room ,,,, but move away before flowers bloom,
They tug gentloy upon the heart…………….but unfulfilled they fall apart.
Beautiful sad poem.
I loved the lines:
Overly self conscious
Yet unaware
Of movements I make
You captured the emotions of such an encounter perfectly.
http://absolutepalaver.wordpress.com/2011/03/22/life/
Kind of a romantic interlude…:)
Beautifully penned! I was there you know… 😉
Enjoyed the emotion, and felt such disappointment at the end!
and you made me think of lost possibilities. great poem 🙂
Lovely words! I hope you know that THEY missed out! 🙂
My Poet’s Rally Poem: Beachy Winter.
But you locked the eyes.. in first stanza itself… then …I am sure the feelings on other side would be same only unexpressed wrapped under a facade.. it happens.. well written and well expressed..
Not giving it a chance
I feel
You walked out the door
These three lines did it for me.I can relate to those “if only…” moments. Beautiful read!!
You had us st the opening line … great write !
Happy Rally !!!
JL&B
A picture that was painted with your words..nice!
unrequited? 🙂 nice flow.
So simple…and yet so real!!! Loved it! Keep writing!
Happy Saturday, please visit poets who were here for you.
cheers.
I really liked this. You captured a feeling I know a lot about. Eye contact can be very scary yet exhilarating. Amazing poem!
Ha ha. Cute. Something that happens with me quite a lot of times. 🙂
no image was needed.. your words told it all, Alex 🙂
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Wow, I totally know what you mean. I do the same thing, hesitancy and excitement all rushing in me. This was great, thanks for sharing 🙂
Epitomises a lot of the “first crushes” we have. 🙂
Very nicely written. Cheers!
Pretty much encompasses all that is a ‘Love at first sight’ type of feeling.
A really nice description of those early encounters with someone. So full of emotion, and so present in the experience. One never knows quite what will come out of a first encounter, but I do have to say, I was surprised when the one in the poem walked out the door! Sounds like, so was the speaker of the poem.
I welcome you to visit my blog to see my rally entry athttp://elainedanforth.wordpress.com/2012/08/22/landing-like-a-cat/
Oh, and Happy Rally!
true description great lines